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The reviews finally came out in the Amazon Breakhrough Novel Awards. Looks like I got trashed by a reviewer who thought my protagonist, Ezekiel Strong, has a “chauvinistic streak”.
Okay, Zeke is a bit snarky, a bit of a smart ass, he comes across as a Hardboiled PI from pulp fiction. I wrote him that way. Underneath he is a lovable, sensitive man who absolutely worships women. Agreed, Zeke's mouth can come off as a brash player but his actions show his true nature.

The reviewer, IMHO, has some issues with gender bias and has a personal ax to grind. My submission, unfortunately was targeted by the reviewers own bias. Perhaps the short submission was not enough of the ms to get a real feel for the main characters, but the reviewer jumped to his/her biased conclusion pretty easily.

The other review was very encouraging. I can't help but think that without the “chauvinistic” tag I might have had a chance in the competition. With it, my manuscript didn't have a prayer. It ways struck down as politically incorrect.
Both of my reviews are posted below.

Amazon Expert Reviewer

Wow, I am impressed with this excerpt. First, I love the Supernatural, so the story is right up my alley. I thought the idea of one person and two worlds was great. The author does not waste time with useless information, but instead gets right into the story by telling us a lot of background details that may come in handy later. The erotic overtones also bring another aspect to the story, making it something more than your average ghost or haunting story. I really liked the idea that kids in the "Underworld" would use "pixie dust", an actual drug to visit our world. The fact that it could explain something that actually happens in our world makes it almost believable. The story has gotten off to a great start, and has grabbed my interest quickly. All of which are good signs of a really great story. The excerpt was very enjoyable, and to be honest I really hope I will be able to read the entire story someday soon. Ezekial Strong: Haunted has captured my imagination and made me feel a part of super secret World. Bottom Line: Great Job!

Amazon Expert Reviewer

This excerpt starts off very strong - it's an interesting concept and the Introduction is seems fairly well written. It does need some work on basic conventions/grammar: commas, "your's" vs. "yours".
"Babe" as said by Zeke is condescending. So is the "A man's gotta do..." and the "sacrifice" nonsense. The story could be quite good, but as it stands is belittled by the main character's chauvinistic streak.
Most women would not immediately strip for a stranger, particularly if they were already on edge and thinking that someone was watching them.
The excerpt seems like it could be similar to The Dresden Files, but it unfortunately falls a bit short.
There is a bit too much going on - the pacing is quick, but it's one thing right after another, and everything seems to be convenient. The damsel in distress willingly strips for the man, a stranger, two nights in a row. Then she happily goes to spend the night at his place. Yet another damsel in distress offers herself up to him - not once, but twice. And all this happens within the short excerpt. It's almost written like the men's version of a detective bodice-ripper.
Again, the story could be much stronger than it currently is. It's got an interesting premise and the writing itself is not terrible. The main character, however, could use some work so that he comes across a bit more professional/realistic.